{"id":7008,"date":"2011-03-19T17:49:13","date_gmt":"2011-03-19T16:49:13","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/www.jochenenglish.de\/?p=7008"},"modified":"2011-03-19T18:26:26","modified_gmt":"2011-03-19T17:26:26","slug":"composition-common-mistakes","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/?p=7008","title":{"rendered":"Composition \u2013 Common Mistakes"},"content":{"rendered":"

Wenn du den fol\u00adgen\u00adden Text f\u00fcr dei\u00adne Sch\u00fc\u00adler anpas\u00adsen m\u00f6ch\u00adtest, kannst du dir die Datei (doc) hier her\u00adun\u00adter\u00adla\u00adden<\/a>.<\/small><\/p>\n

Topic: The Inter\u00adnet \u2013 A Dan\u00adge\u00adrous Addiction?<\/strong><\/p>\n

Title doesn\u2019t refer to \/ fit main part.<\/h4>\n

Title: Stair\u00adway to Addic\u00adtion (cf. Led Zep\u00adpe\u00adlin: Stair\u00adway to Heaven)<\/p>\n

Main part claims that Inter\u00adnet is NOT addictive.<\/p>\n

Introduction doesn\u2019t introduce the topic.<\/h4>\n

Recent\u00adly a young man died after he had play\u00aded an online game for seve\u00adral days wit\u00adhout almost any inter\u00adrup\u00adti\u00adon. This cau\u00adsed a con\u00adtro\u00adver\u00adsi\u00adal debate.<\/p>\n

Introduction only announces what the writer is going to do.<\/h4>\n

In the fol\u00adlo\u00adwing I\u2019m going to dis\u00adcuss whe\u00adther the Inter\u00adnet can lead to dan\u00adge\u00adrous addiction.<\/p>\n

<\/span>Introduction introduces different  topic.<\/span><\/h4>\n

Recent\u00adly a young man died after he had play\u00aded an online game for seve\u00adral days wit\u00adhout almost any inter\u00adrup\u00adti\u00adon. This cau\u00adsed a con\u00adtro\u00adver\u00adsi\u00adal deba\u00adte about the ques\u00adti\u00adon whe\u00adther cer\u00adtain online games should be prohibited.<\/p>\n

<\/span>Main part: No topic sentence.<\/span><\/h4>\n

Wrong: <\/strong>First of all on sites like PokerStars.com you can lose a lot of money.<\/p>\n

First of all online games can be high\u00adly addic\u00adti\u00adve. On sites like PokerStars.com you can lose a lot of money, becau\u00adse you easi\u00adly lose track of how much money you\u2019ve alre\u00ada\u00addy lost. [\u2026]<\/p>\n

<\/span>Main part: Topic sentence doesn\u2019t fit the following examples.<\/span><\/h4>\n

First of all online games can be high\u00adly addic\u00adti\u00adve. Some peo\u00adp\u00adle for exam\u00adp\u00adle feel a strong pres\u00adsu\u00adre to check their email all the time. [\u2026]<\/p>\n

<\/span>Main part: More than one aspect \/ topic per paragraph.<\/span><\/h4>\n

First of all online games can be high\u00adly addic\u00adti\u00adve. On sites like PokerStars.com you can lose a lot of money, becau\u00adse you easi\u00adly lose track of how much money you\u2019ve alre\u00ada\u00addy lost. Also chat rooms can be very addic\u00adti\u00adve, because \u2026<\/p>\n

Conclusion doesn\u2019t fit introduction and\/or main part.<\/h4>\n

Main part: There\u2019s a serious dan\u00adger of addiction<\/p>\n

Con\u00adclu\u00adsi\u00adon: All in all you can say that the dan\u00adgers of addic\u00adtion are great\u00adly exaggerated.<\/p>\n

Conclusion is a pure repetition of main part.<\/h4>\n

Final\u00adly online games can be high\u00adly addictive. [\u2026]<\/p>\n

All in all you can say that online games can be high\u00adly addictive.<\/p>\n

<\/span>Conclusion presents new argument.<\/span><\/h4>\n

All in all I think that the dan\u00adgers of addic\u00adtion are great\u00adly exag\u00adge\u00adra\u00adted. For exam\u00adp\u00adle online games in gene\u00adral don\u2019t make peo\u00adp\u00adle addicted. [\u2026]<\/p>\n

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Wenn du den fol\u00adgen\u00adden Text f\u00fcr dei\u00adne Sch\u00fc\u00adler anpas\u00adsen m\u00f6ch\u00adtest, kannst du dir die Datei (doc) hier her\u00adun\u00adter\u00adla\u00adden. Topic: The Inter\u00adnet \u2013 A Dan\u00adge\u00adrous Addic\u00adtion? Title doesn\u2019t refer to \/ fit main part. Title: Stair\u00adway to Addic\u00adtion (cf. Led Zep\u00adpe\u00adlin: Stair\u00adway to Hea\u00adven) Main part claims that Inter\u00adnet is NOT addictive.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":25,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"closed","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"wp_typography_post_enhancements_disabled":false,"footnotes":""},"categories":[8],"tags":[71],"class_list":["post-7008","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-alg","tag-composition"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/7008","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/users\/25"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcomments&post=7008"}],"version-history":[{"count":2,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/7008\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":7016,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=\/wp\/v2\/posts\/7008\/revisions\/7016"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fmedia&parent=7008"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Fcategories&post=7008"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/jochenlueders.de\/index.php?rest_route=%2Fwp%2Fv2%2Ftags&post=7008"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}